Muchos problemas con el ambiente. En mi comunidad, hay mucho polución en los lagos. También mucha contaminación en el aire. Los pescados de los ríos y lagos son morir porque no viven en agua limpia. También, es difícil para nosotros viven cuando el aire esta no bien. Por ejemplo, en otras comunidades ellos tienen un mismo problema. Tienen botas de basuras que produce contaminación en el mar. En la Florida, un mayor problema es energía. La gente conduce mucha energía para sus cosas y varias otras cosas. Es muy malo que la gente ser un mayor problema y la causa. Necesito que nosotros informemos las personas a la destruyendo de la capa de ozono. Es importante que digan las personas que hacer porque ese ayuda el mundo. Cuando la gente está informa a los peligros de polución, esperar que ellos pararan. Un ejemplo esta tienen el presidente pronunciar un discurso a los efectos negativos todos las personas tienen en el ambiente. Pienso que las gentes del mundo recibir el información y ayudan a salvar la planeta pronto.
Name: Stephanie
Date: 10-22-07
Assignment: El Medio Ambiente
Before writing, I think of what I know about the topic. I make a list of ideas, words, and phrases I might use.
yes
I organize my thoughts and ideas so that I can focus on one central idea.
yes
I choose ideas and examples that are appropriate for this culture.
no
I make sure the writing has a definite beginning, middle, and end.
yes
I try to make my writing interesting.
yes
I write a first draft and then I reread and revise.
no
I check to make sure that my writing makes sense.
yes
I make sure the sentences relate to each other.
yes
I use familiar language structures so I know I am writing correctly
yes
If I do not know a word, I use a word or phrase I do know.
no
I make sure punctuation is correct according to the rules in this language.
yes
I check my spelling.
yes
I check my use of verb tenses (present, past, future, etc.).
no
I check my use of gender and agreements (masculine, feminine, neuter).
yes
I ask someone who knows the language (classmate) to read my writing and give me feedback.
no
I make sure the final copy is legible (handwritten or typed).
yes
What I think I did very well on in this assignment:
I was very descriptive in my writing and did not have trouble trying to find things to say.
What I think I need to focus/improve on next time:
I need to work on my verb usage. I sometimes mix up past tense with future tense.
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Student Writer: Stephanie
Student Reviewer: Roger
Assignment: Formal Writing
Date: 10/17
The assignment is legible (written neatly or typed).
5
The central theme of the writing is clear.
5
The writing has a definite beginning, middle, and end.
4
The assignment is interesting to read.
4
There are enough details and examples to make the ideas understandable.
3
The sentences relate to each other.
4
The ideas are appropriate for the culture.
4
The sentence structures are overall correct and understandable.
4
The writer uses punctuation correctly.
4
The writer uses verb tenses correctly.
3
The writer uses correct subject/verb agreements.
4
The writer uses gender agreements correctly.
5
What I really liked about this assignment:
I thought you brought in details from different sources pretty well.
I have the following questions about your assignment:
What about other peopels ideas on the environment?
Some suggestions for next time:Make sure you check your verb usage.
Student Writer:
Stephanie
Student Reviewer:
Magen
Assignment:
Formal Writing #3-El Medio Ambiente
Date:
12/7/2007
The assignment is legible (written neatly or typed).
5
The central theme of the writing is clear.
5
The writing has a definite beginning, middle, and end.
4
The assignment is interesting to read.
5
There are enough details and examples to make the ideas understandable.
5
The sentences relate to each other.
4
The ideas are appropriate for the culture.
5
The sentence structures are overall correct and understandable.
4
The writer uses punctuation correctly.
5
The writer has checked spelling so that spelling is overall correct.
5
The writer uses verb tenses correctly.
4
The writer uses correct subject/verb agreements.
4
The writer uses gender agreements correctly.
5
What I really liked about this assignment:
I really liked the information you included in this assignment. I agree with your opinions about the environment.
I have the following questions about your assignment:
I do not have any questions about this assignment.
Some suggestions for next time:
I think your writing was great...
Student Writer:
Stephanie
Student Reviewer:
Laura
Assignment:
Formal Writing 3
Date:
121707
The assignment is legible (written neatly or typed).
5
The central theme of the writing is clear.
5
The writing has a definite beginning, middle, and end.
5
The assignment is interesting to read.
5
There are enough details and examples to make the ideas understandable.
4
The sentences relate to each other.
5
The ideas are appropriate for the culture.
5
The sentence structures are overall correct and understandable.
5
The writer uses punctuation correctly.
5
The writer has checked spelling so that spelling is overall correct.
5
The writer uses verb tenses correctly.
5
The writer uses correct subject/verb agreements.
5
The writer uses gender agreements correctly.
5
What I really liked about this assignment:
nice sentence flow
I have the following questions about your assignment:
whats up?
Some suggestions for next time:
you rock
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